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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed

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There are many cities/towns and even countries which are completely dependent on
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 for their revenues. In fact,
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 is the major industry and occupation of people in these places.
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, it has been the major contributor to the growth and development of these places.
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, if it operated in an unorganized manner, it could
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 result in trouble for people at large.
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 adds to the growth and prosperity of the economy by bringing in foreign currency to the economy,
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, it contributes to the per capita income in
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 reliant places. It
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 facilitates other related industries like hotel and hospitality, transport, recreational or adventure activities, handicraft industries etc. It helps in spreading the knowledge about the cultural heritage, cuisines and traditions across different places. Places like Thailand, Goa, Kerala, Cambodia, Bali etc are
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-driven places and are flourishing with the help of it.
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, if it's not organized and well managed, it could result in polluting the surroundings and environment by the tourists, damage to the historical and heritage sites where the tourists need to be careful with their conduct.
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, some local tourists end up writing their names on historical monuments in India, people throw plastic bags and other useless things on the beaches which not only reduces the attraction value of these places eventually but
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 harm the environment. I think
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 can play a vital role not just in the prosperity of any economy but
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 in bringing people across the world closer to each other. It is the source of livelihood for so many people that the advantages are far too many while the drawbacks can be easily tackled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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