Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities.   To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While many hold the belief that professional careers
such
as nurses should be paid more than celebrities, others have
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idea and suggest that sportspersons and entertainers deserve more
income
than professional workers. I hold the view that the
income
of each group should be based on
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services that they provide rather than
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ame of their
job
. On the one hand, many people affirm that essential jobs should be paid a high salary. Since these professions are dealing with public health or
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uture of society, professionals deserve the highest possible payment. While it is unanimously agreed that they should be quite well off, comparing their
income
with celebrities does not seem appropriate.
For example
,
although
the
job
of a teacher is vital for training our children, their
income
is much less than a successful professional
soccer
player,
however
, the number of teachers in society is much more than
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rofessional
soccer
player, which
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the difference in
income
. The total
income
of all teachers
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many times more than all of
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occer players.
On the other hand
, face values,
such
as sportspersons and entertainment personalities are distinguished and unique in what they do. The payment for every career is determined by the uniqueness of
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ob; were more people able to do a
job
, their salary would be lower.
For instance
, many people after proper training can be a nurse, whereas million youngster start playing
soccer
every year; a few have the chance to play in
first
league team
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only one will become Messi.
This
reason justifies the very high incomes of face values. It is logical to conclude that it would not be appropriate to judge the
income
of a worker by the area he or she is giving the service, rather than their salary should be based on the peculiarity of their work. I personally believe that the person who is talented enough to be unique
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a high
income
, yet he or she may be a surgeon who performs a unique surgery, or an entertainer who enchants millions of people. I
also
suggest that
instead
of the
income
of every profession, stress should be on
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to the services that they provide rather than the name of
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rofession.
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