Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
While many hold the belief that professional careers
such
as nurses should be paid more than celebrities, others have contradicting
idea and suggest that sportspersons and entertainers deserve more Change the verb form
to contradict
income
than professional workers. I hold the view that the income
of each group should be based on their
services that they provide rather than Change the pronoun
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ame of their Add an article
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On the one hand, many people affirm that essential jobs should be paid a high salary. Since these professions are dealing with public health or f
uture of society, professionals deserve the highest possible payment. While it is unanimously agreed that they should be quite well off, comparing their Add an article
the
income
with celebrities does not seem appropriate. For example
, although
the job
of a teacher is vital for training our children, their income
is much less than a successful professional soccer
player, however
, the number of teachers in society is much more than p
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soccer
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the difference in Change the verb form
is causing
income
. The total income
of all teachers are
many times more than all of Change the verb form
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On the other hand
, face values, such
as sportspersons and entertainment personalities are distinguished and unique in what they do. The payment for every career is determined by the uniqueness of j
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the
job
, their salary would be lower. For instance
, many people after proper training can be a nurse, whereas million youngster start playing soccer
every year; a few have the chance to play in first
league team; and
only one will become Messi. Change the punctuation
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;
This
reason justifies the very high incomes of face values.
It is logical to conclude that it would not be appropriate to judge the income
of a worker by the area he or she is giving the service, rather than their salary should be based on the peculiarity of their work. I personally believe that the person who is talented enough to be unique deserve
a high Change the verb form
deserves
income
, yet he or she may be a surgeon who performs a unique surgery, or an entertainer who enchants millions of people. I also
suggest that instead
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of every profession, stress should be on o
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