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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the modern era, an increase in the number of health problems is a major concern across the countries. With each passing day, people spend a lot of time with doctors that really make their lives complicated, Their is enough chance for improvement.
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 number of foods do react differently because of ample
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 used widely in most countries now. They are a sign of improvement. We must ensure every generation has access to them.
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ise and fall in health issues. Awareness is another area where governments and private groups or individuals can share responsibility. Developing countries are
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ssue at a small level. Since developed nations have always been ahead in the terms of solution. In fact mostly to get credit for it.
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, in the USA people do spend more time in parties and restaurants. In conclusion,
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 though time changes and people may vary in their opinions. I think only positive changes can bring more benefits.
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ot of things to get done quickly, but one should remember there are hidden issues. Impose governments to a higher tax on
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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