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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the modern era, an increase in the number of health problems is a major concern across the countries. With each passing day, people spend a lot of time with doctors that really make their lives complicated, Their is enough chance for improvement.
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 number of foods do react differently because of ample
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 used widely in most countries now. They are a sign of improvement. We must ensure every generation has access to them.
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ise and fall in health issues. Awareness is another area where governments and private groups or individuals can share responsibility. Developing countries are
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ssue at a small level. Since developed nations have always been ahead in the terms of solution. In fact mostly to get credit for it.
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