Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the modern era, there are a lot of improvements in the field of medicine, we have
also
seen that many old age people have benefited from
this
advancement as they can continue to live a healthy life. In
this
essay,I shall endeavour to expound the various way people after retirement can be helpful to society.
To begin
with, unlike in the past many individuals remain to be active in the community even after their retirement. With the advancements in the medical field,almost every disease can be either be controlled or cured completely.
Thus
, a retired person can live a hassle-free life, and contribute positively to civilization. Because they are people with a bundle of both positives,and negative experiences.
For Instance
, sharing their stories with the youngsters of today's generation will help the kids develop a new, and brighter perspective about life.
Furthermore
, they can be appointed to higher leadership positions as they possess an ample amount of knowledge and experience.
Hence
, when the organization suffers from any issue their expertise can be effectively used in solving the problem.
For Example
, In India,many retired IPS and IAS officers are appointed in senior positions of both the government and private organizations.
Conversely
, a group of people does not believe that older people can be of any use to them or their community, and
also
are reluctant to take proper care of them.
This
is one of the main reasons for increased old age homes in India. There are many causes of the eldest people are treated badly by their children and some succumb to those injuries. To recapitulate, being active even after retirement helps the oldest people to live gregariously. Their knowledge and experience enhance society.
Thus
, we should create opportunities for the oldest generation of our community as well.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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