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1. Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe it is best to travel by bicycle. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The acceptable mode of
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 in cities is still a debatable topic. While a bunch of people believe that motor vehicles are the best means of
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 to be used in cities, others state that bicycles are better alternatives.
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 automobiles are a comfortable and fast mode of
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, in my opinion, bicycles are better for health and
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nvironment. No doubt private cars are attractive means of
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 in major cities. They make
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 convenient. Driving a car is not a physically strenuous activity.
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, someone driving a car is not exposed to harsh
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, take the case of Moscow where the temperature reaches
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reezing point in winter. In
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it is impossible to use anything other than cars or public transport.
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, cars can save us a lot of time, especially when a person knows how to avoid congested traffic by using highways.
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 to the cost of fuels, maintenance and registry, finding parking spaces is another principle obstacle in utilizing private cars. Bicycles as a mode of
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 in urban regions,
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, are fascinating alternatives. They help to improve the physical fitness of riders and
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 control obesity-related health illnesses. A study showed that a daily 30 minutes bicycle ride can mitigate the risk of hypertension, diabetes and bad lipid disorders.
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, bicycles are eco-friendly means of
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 to say that there is no risk of air pollution which is the key concern with the use of cars.
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 it is evident that using bicycles for
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 improves air quality in main cities. I opine that
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 method of
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 is good for urban areas and authorities should encourage more and more people to adopt it. To conclude, bicycles and cars have their merits and demerits as modes of
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. Even so, since pollution is a major problem in cities an eco-friendly option like bicycles is better than cars especially in favourable
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 conditions.
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, during extreme
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 conditions, it is better to use cars.
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