Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that many people believe that schools should only teach academic subjects and prepare students for formal exams. I disagree completely with
this
view, and I would argue that teaching practical life
skills
is essential.
Firstly
, it is a mistake to tailor teaching strategies to the narrow focus of academic subjects and exam success. It is impossible for every student to pursue a successful career with fantastic job prospects in fields
such
as finance, medicine, law or education. All of these demand academic
skills
, but the job market for these professions is relatively small. Those who fail their exams will consider themselves as failures.
Such
negative feelings will inevitably shape a child’s personality and values during their formative years. Only a few students who are high-flyers will succeed and enjoy the material rewards of their academic success.
Secondly
,
while
children
need to acquire practical
skills
, there may be no family or friends to help them. Consider,
for example
, single-parent households, with no father to teach DIY
skills
, or households in which working mothers have no time to teach
children
to cook or sew. There are, too, many dysfunctional families in which, for whatever reasons, parental involvement in bringing up their offspring is almost completely absent. Yet
children
need to learn these domestic
skills
, and the only place for many of them to do
this
is in school.
Otherwise
, when they enter adult life, they will rely on expensive ready meals or on buying new clothes and furniture when all
that is
needed is a simple repair. In conclusion, I totally disagree with an educational policy which focuses only on academic subjects and exam success. Schools must place equal value on life
skills
to ensure the full development of
children
.
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Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, your argument and examples could be more focused and incisive.
content
Try to provide a clearer definition of what you consider to be 'career success' in your argument, as this would help to add depth to your discussion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic success
  • passing examinations
  • cookery
  • dressmaking
  • woodwork
  • learn from family and friends
  • personalized learning environment
  • supportive learning environment
  • well-rounded education
  • school curriculum
  • resources
  • expert guidance
  • enhance creativity
  • problem-solving
  • teamwork
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