Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that many people believe that schools should only teach academic subjects and prepare students for formal exams. I disagree completely with
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view, and I would argue that teaching practical life
skills
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is essential.
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, it is a mistake to tailor teaching strategies to the narrow focus of academic subjects and exam success. It is impossible for every student to pursue a successful career with fantastic job prospects in fields
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as finance, medicine, law or education. All of these demand academic
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, but the job market for these professions is relatively small. Those who fail their exams will consider themselves as failures.
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negative feelings will inevitably shape a child’s personality and values during their formative years. Only a few students who are high-flyers will succeed and enjoy the material rewards of their academic success.
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,
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children
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need to acquire practical
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, there may be no family or friends to help them. Consider,
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, single-parent households, with no father to teach DIY
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, or households in which working mothers have no time to teach
children
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to cook or sew. There are, too, many dysfunctional families in which, for whatever reasons, parental involvement in bringing up their offspring is almost completely absent. Yet
children
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need to learn these domestic
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, and the only place for many of them to do
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is in school.
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, when they enter adult life, they will rely on expensive ready meals or on buying new clothes and furniture when all
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needed is a simple repair. In conclusion, I totally disagree with an educational policy which focuses only on academic subjects and exam success. Schools must place equal value on life
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to ensure the full development of
children
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.
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Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, your argument and examples could be more focused and incisive.
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Try to provide a clearer definition of what you consider to be 'career success' in your argument, as this would help to add depth to your discussion.
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Consider differentiating your ideas more clearly, as currently it seems both of your paragraphs present very similar points. This would also make your argument more compelling.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic success
  • passing examinations
  • cookery
  • dressmaking
  • woodwork
  • learn from family and friends
  • personalized learning environment
  • supportive learning environment
  • well-rounded education
  • school curriculum
  • resources
  • expert guidance
  • enhance creativity
  • problem-solving
  • teamwork
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