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More and more people are using computer and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers on paper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to advancement in technologies, there has been a rise in the use of computers and other gadgets which has
subsequently
 reduced the requirement of notepads and hard-copies in general. People have opted for computers to scroll through the news and latest updates rather than newspapers. The essay here is aimed to argue both sides of the argument.
Firstly
, there has been a rapid growth of online access
of
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 data and information which has led to the access of media via these devices. Due to ease of access and availability of smartphones at a cheaper price, most of the people have started to utilize the device in hand to check for media updates. People often watch news and gossips over smartphones at any time without having a need
of
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 carrying
hardcopies
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hard copies
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.
This
 has reduced hassle and made things very convenient in recent years.
However
, there is another segment of the population who still rely on printed mode to have their daily dose of updates.
For instance
, few elderly people have still not accustomed to the modern
way
 of living and follow the old
way
.
This
 has been the reason why senior citizens are the major buyers of the newspapers who relish their time reading news while sipping tea in a traditional
way
. To summarize,
n
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ew generation
have
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 opted a new
way
 of consuming data and information while the previous one’s stick to the older method and like to continue with print media.
Therefore
, it has been quite evident that despite gadgets have brought a revolutionary change in the lifestyle of people but few still do not find comfortable adapting to
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atest trend.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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