Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. What causes obesity and how can it be solved?

Due to the advent of technology, most of the people do their work by machines and electronic gadgets. People are less involved in physical activities which lead to several health hassles
such
as,
obesity
, diabetes etcetera.
This
essay will not only highlight the problem related to
obesity
but
also
present some potential measure to resolve it
To begin
with, there are some reasons why
this
problem occurs especially in rich countries at the top of
that is
due to less involvement in physical activities. To be precise, nowadays people are more dependent on machines even small to small work they do by operating machines which reduce the human efforts because every work can be done by tools
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they become a couch potato. Due to less involvement in physical activities
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they faced several health problems in their life as
obesity
is one of that.
Moreover
, people in developed countries mostly consume junk foods which can store
e
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xcessive amount of fat in their body and they will become obese. On the flip side, there are some solutions to mitigate
this
issue.
Firstly
, they should have to make their custom diet plan according to their body mass index and should consume
b
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alanced diet and avoid junk foods.
Likewise
, they should join any training
center
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or gym where they should exercise and burn their calories
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as a result
the extra fat of their body will reduce by the passage of time To conclude,
although
obesity
is a
mammuth
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mammoth
problem in many countries, it would be mitigated if people may involve in physical activities and consume
b
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alanced diet.
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