Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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industry is often considered as one of the highest paying work in the world. While some celebrities earn an enormous amount of money but act irresponsibly, many famous personalities spend their wealth for the welfare of
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society
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hand, entertainers,
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as actors, players or singers earn tremendous wages by showcasing their performance.
However
, most of
society
would be vulnerable without the emergency services worker but their income significantly less than these celebrities.
Moreover
, a group of young celebrities can encourage teenagers
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picking up bad habits from them.
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, a recent article suggested that approximately 15%
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high-school students start smoking in their
first
year of college by following their favourite models and musicians. These celebrities
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spend a vast amount of money
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makeup unnecessarily and build unrealistic expectation among their audience.
On the other hand
, a massive range of entertainers from all walks of the media industry become
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ambassador at
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nited Nations and helps the charities significantly. Due to their name and fame, we can reach out to communities, societies and even countries in a short period of time and receive
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apid response for the cause.
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renowned personalities are engaged in the well-fare of
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society
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valuable benefits to the people in need. In summary, creative people may earn
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ot more than community services employees but they are ultimately accountable for their own actions.
This
essay has discussed that even though they may not be very conscious about the negative effects they can transfer to the followers, they need to work in the best interest for the same people who made them famous, rich and powerful. My opinion is to enforce the rules and regulations in the media channels so that they don’t praise the harmful aspects of any superstars and broadcast the positivity among the audience.
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