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The uses of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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As social
media
 platforms continue to grow,
real life
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 interaction is being replaced.
This
 can be both beneficial and harmful in many ways. There are several benefits of using social
media
 as a replacement for face-to-face contact.
Firstly
, by using social
media
 networks,
people
 can communicate with other users regardless of their locations, as long as everyone involved has access to an Internet-connected device and a social networking account.
This
 provides a helpful way to stay in touch with those whom we care about,
such
 as long-distance family and friends.
As a result
,
people
 no longer have to end relationships with their loved ones when they move to a new place, which might have been the case before the invention of
such
 social platforms.
Furthermore
, on the Internet, users of social networking services do not have to leave and respond to messages at the same time as their contacts.
This
 means there is no need to set up a specific time and venue in order to meet someone, which allows
people
, especially busy workers, to save time and avoid scheduling problems.
Nonetheless
, there are many downsides to the replacement of face to face communication with social
media
. One disadvantage could be that those who primarily use social
media
 as a means of communication often rely on text-based communication and the use of emoji.
This
 means that important factors in maintaining a conversation
such
 as
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ye contact and facial expressions are absent. Not having these abilities may prevent a person from connecting with others in a deep and meaningful way. As a consequence, they are unlikely to form or maintain intimate relationships.
In addition
, social
media
 tends to show distorted images of an individual's lives.
People
 often only showcase their best sides online, whereas they might be more truthful when communicating with their friends in real life.
Hence
, those who use the internet may more likely view their own lives as inadequate compared to that of others. In conclusion, while the tendency to communicate via social
media
instead
 of talking in person can be beneficial, it
also
 has several drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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