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Some people think that government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals.Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that there should be a
tax
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 on unhealthy items so that
people
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 can live a long and healthy life. I agree with
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 statement and think both government and pupils have to take the responsibility to make
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 world a better place to live. To start with, having
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nhealthy meal from the multinational and renowned organisations leads
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many health-related
problems
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. These companies add some kind of products in their
food
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, which compels the customers to come again and eat that junk even at the sake of their lives. To illustrate,
people
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 suffer from the overweight, heart disease and breathing
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 after eating the street or junk
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 regularly,
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 there should be a higher amount of
tax
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 on these type of products so that one can think before going out to buy these types of
food
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.
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, nowadays individuals are becoming more couch potato and do not want to do some physical activities.
People
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 who are having a sitting job or partners who are working a whole day prefer to order
food
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 from outside by
food
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 delivery services or they go for taking out, which has no nutrients and considered not good for the health.
People
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 want to enjoy their
food
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, but without being active, not even for some hours. If there will be a
tax
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 imposed on the unhealthy
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 these citizens will prefer to eat homemade
food
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 which will be full of nutrients and will encourage children the same and they will not face any health-related
problems
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 in the near future. Ultimately, having a
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 will reduce the stress of doing exercise, as
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that is
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 cooked in a home is healthier than the outside
food
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. To sum up,
problems
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 related to health and bright and healthier future for the children are the two main reasons which encourage the government to have a
tax
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 on unhealthy
food
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.
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, if the outside
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 should be consumed in a moderate amount and only on special occasions
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 it has no harm.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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