In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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there are new materials that have been made with mixtures of more than 2 or more cloth material that make clothing look like animal skin. I strongly agree to the point that it is no longer necessary to use

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related to

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, clothing and medicine. In many spirituals books, it is considered a sin to kill an animal for benefit of human beings. Earlier in 1900,it was difficult to grow a non-seasonal crop and it would take to a considerable amount of time for a full-grown crop and

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sell it to market without any support of machines. It was difficult to store

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as there were no cold storages built like nowadays where you can keep and preserve

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for long. It was

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difficult to transport

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to places where the cultivation land was not present and transporting quickly till the time

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does not lose its freshness was

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difficult due to lack of modern vehicles. Back

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it became necessary for individuals to eat

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for their survival.

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in cold places,it was very difficult to fight winters without the availability of heaters so human started using animal skin to keep them warm and survive the winters. In older times it was very hard to make medicines for everyone with right amount chemicals available around the world so humans started using

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to survive. But now with technology driving the world,we are no longer dependent on

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for these things. Even snow studies show vegan

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is best for humans and humans can survive on vegan

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for the whole lifespan.

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using

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for our needs is no longer needed in a new era.

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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