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In many countries, teenagers are being encouraged to do part-time jobs. Some people think it is a positive development while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many places nowadays provide
work
 for youngsters,not as full time but some time after or before
school
. Others find it good but others don't.
This
 easy will tackle both positive, negative and my own perspective.
Firstly
, in other places, young people in
this
 generation find themselves in front of their computer and playing games, they didn't even think of helping the household chores,
however
,the parents have the important role of encouraging their child to get a
job
 and make income in their own. It would help the youngsters to see what it's like to have
work
 and not just sitting at home. It makes them mature to think about what is life and hard
work
 mean.
Secondly
, some people find it not encouraging for the teenagers to do because
this
 can lead the young people not go to
school
 anymore since they have already
work
 and get their own money,
therefore
 going to
school
 is not their priority anymore
instead
 making more money is in their mind.
For example
 in my country, when a child or teenagers will go to
work
 or a part-time
job
 they didn't go to
school
 anymore because they already satisfy with what they have and can provide to their want. In conclusion, proper supervision is needed when the teenagers will have a part-time
job
 at the same time they will go to
school
 as well, the government will educate and inform them that having
this
work
 is just to show them what is like to have money that it is not easy and they would realise the hard
work
 of their parents. Education is essential to get a good
job
 in the future.
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