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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem

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It has become apparent in recent
time
 that more and more different
people
 are eating fast
food
.
However
, doctors and scientists say about the dangers of fast
food
. There is no doubt that fast
food
 is bad for
h
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ealth of
people
. In
this
 essay
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I am going to analyses the subject prior to making a conclusion.
First
, a lot of
people
 do not have free
time
 in the modern world. They all
time
 run to work, run
to
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home, so they eat on the go. They do not have free
time
 for quality
food
.
Sometime
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, they do not have breakfast or dinner, so
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the
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same
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some
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people
 give
a
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bad
food
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their children. Unfortunately, adult
people
 teach their children
e
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at bad
food
, despite their knowledge.
Secondly
, fast
food
 is
m
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ental habit. There is no doubt that fast
food
 has dangerous things.
For example
, there are salt and sugar. These dangerous things cause addiction. The more you eat fast
food
 the more you want
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eat.
As a result
, a lot of
people
 put on weight and have any illness. In conclusion, I would like
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recommended do not walk in
p
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a
the
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lace where
people
 can buy fast
food
.
Also
,
people
 should remember about
the
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health. After all, health
people
’s is
r
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a
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oad in the future.
People
 should
to
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choose quality
instead
 of quantity.
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