Today, some young people say that their mobile phones are the most important thing they own. Do you think that the popularity of mobile phones is a good or bad thing?

It is believed that cell phones have become
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ery crucial thing for the
children
among all other
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like laptop and desktop. It is always the debatable issue that whether it is boon or bane for youngsters. Personally, I think that the mobile phone is not of any worth for
children
because
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its usage results in the significant reduction in their studying habit and playing mobile is unhealthy too.
Firstly
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young
children
get lost within mobile if they get it and do not care about their study. In another word, the online games, social
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medias
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, and so many things on it
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the
children
for a longer time and they forget about their task.
For instance
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children
used to be so dedicated and
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when there was no any cell phones ,but ,in present days they have access to it and
consequently
they have become
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and less focused on their study.
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ell phone has become
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worst invention for them as it is distracting them a lot from their studies.
Secondly
, the
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issue is the most serious issues which
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being in
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risk due to the use of mobile phones.
To begin
with, playing video games via the mobile does not really
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physical movement
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most of the youngsters spend sedentary lifestyle. Eventually , they get suffered from various kind of disease in their early age.
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certain eyes problems like eye irritation,burning eyes and blurred vision. To exemplify , there was one student of mine , who used to
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at his mobile for most of the time, sitting on his sofa. Unfortunately, he went through so many
health
problems like overweight, and early age diabetes.
Hence
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obile phone is not suitable for a child, if we consider it wisely from the
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of
health
. In conclusion,
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it might be beneficial for adults
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totally worthless for
children
due to its negative impact on their reading habit along with impaired
health
situations originated from the use of it.
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