Today, some young people say that their mobile phones are the most important thing they own. Do you think that the popularity of mobile phones is a good or bad thing?
It is believed that cell phones have become
v
ery crucial thing for the Add an article
a
children
among all other gadget
like laptop and desktop. It is always the debatable issue that whether it is boon or bane for youngsters. Personally, I think that the mobile phone is not of any worth for Change the wording
gadgets
children
because,
its usage results in the significant reduction in their studying habit and playing mobile is unhealthy too.
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Firstly
, the
young Remove the article
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children
get lost within mobile if they get it and do not care about their study. In another word, the online games, social Correct your spelling
media
medias
, and so many things on it Correct your spelling
media
hooks
the Change the verb form
hook
children
for a longer time and they forget about their task. For instance
, school going
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school-going
children
used to be so dedicated and hard working
when there was no any cell phones ,but ,in present days they have access to it and Correct your spelling
hardworking
consequently
they have become more dull
and less focused on their study. Replace the words
duller
Therefore
,c
ell phone has become Change the article
the
a
worst invention for them as it is distracting them a lot from their studies.
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Secondly
, the health
issue is the most serious issues which is
being in Change the verb form
are
a
risk due to the use of mobile phones. Remove the article
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To begin
with, playing video games via the mobile does not really needs
physical movementChange the verb form
need
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, as a result,
as a result
most of the youngsters spend sedentary lifestyle. Eventually , they get suffered from various kind of disease in their early age. In addition
, watching the screen of mobile for a long time may cause the
certain eyes problems like eye irritation,burning eyes and blurred vision. To exemplify , there was one student of mine , who used to Remove the article
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stear
at his mobile for most of the time, sitting on his sofa. Unfortunately, he went through so many Correct your spelling
stare
steer
health
problems like overweight, and early age diabetes.Hence
, m
obile phone is not suitable for a child, if we consider it wisely from the Add an article
the
a
prospective
of Correct your spelling
perspective
health
.
In conclusion, Although
it might be beneficial for adults but
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its
totally worthless for Replace the word
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it is
children
due to its negative impact on their reading habit along with impaired health
situations originated from the use of it.Submitted by namunakarki23 on
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