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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Fast
foods
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 are becoming increasingly popular and enable
people
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 to eat whilst living in a fast-paced environment. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 rising trend.
Firstly
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, I will discuss the advantages of fast
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.
Secondly
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, I will consider the disadvantages. Modern lifestyle requires
people
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 to be on their toes all the time. With demanding work schedules spanning for at least 10 to 12 hours in a day to coming back home completely exhausted to take up any chore,
people
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 have the tendency to skip their
meals
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. For
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 reason,
foods
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such
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 as McDonald's are very popular as they are quick, cheap and readily available. The availability of
convenience
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foods
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 has reduced the number of
people
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 who skip their breakfast, lunch and dinner. These
meals
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 can be eaten on the go and do not require
people
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 to take out time from their schedules which they are quite helpful in allowing
people
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 to keep up with their jam-packed routines.
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, the disadvantages of eating
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meals
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 are quite severe. Since
convenience
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meals
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 are mostly packaged
meals
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 that require quick heating in the microwave before consumption, they naturally contain a lot of added flavours, chemicals and preservatives. Regular consumption of preservatives is harmful
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 long term health.
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 to
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,
convenience
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foods
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 do not have the same nutritive value as traditionally prepared, fresh food. To conclude,
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convenience
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foods
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 have made it extremely easy for
people
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 to maintain an eating schedule while managing their modern lifestyles, it is important that a balance is created between eating traditional food and
convenience
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 food to maintain overall health while leading a modern life.
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