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Using money for all 65-year old people would be good use for government teaching computer skill. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#money #-year #people #government #computer #skill
With the recent technological developments
such
 as computers and the Internet, our
lives
 have changed dramatically including senior generation.
Although
 there are a couple of benefits of teaching
computer
skill
 for elderly
people
, I insist that spending the
government
's money for them to teach
computer
skill
 is waste. It is true that there are some benefits to teaching
computer
 skills for seniors. One main advantage of
this
 is that they have more option in their daily
lives
. If elderly
people
 can use the internet, their
lives
 become convenient because they can easily access to purchase objects as well as find communities.
For example
, my grandfather who has a gait problem used to go shopping to actual stores but after acquiring internet
skill
, he can buy whatever he wants even it is heavy products like water.
However
, I believe that the
government
 should use its budget on other important use rather than teaching
computer
skill
 for seniors. As
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aging
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,
people
 are more likely to suffer from diseases
such
 as diabetes and cancer. It is vital to treat these physical difficulties with receiving some help from public money because the cost of treatment is extremely expensive.
Therefore
, if seniors cannot afford to pay the treatment fee, they cannot get enough treatment and if it is the worst they lose their
lives
. In conclusion, while it is true that some elderly
people
 benefit from
computer
skill
 from the
government
, I claim that
government
 should spend money on medical cost because
this
 is more financially helpful for all of the senior citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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