some people say that the environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People held different views about whether the
loss
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of certain
species
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of fauna and flora is more important or whether other environmental
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are more urgent.
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there are serious arguments on both sides I believe there are more important
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as global warming that influents humanity in several ways immediately,
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,
species
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of plants and animals.
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essay demonstrates
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the importance of natural diversity and the consequent results of the
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of
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diversity followed by an analysis of global warming from other environmental
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and how it affects both humanity and other life forms.
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with, the
loss
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of particular
species
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of plants and animals is a more serious problem than it is concerned by most people. A decrease in a difference of life forms leads to total environmental disbalance.
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, the extinction of one certain kind of plant or animal means the
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of a step in the natural chain, and
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of
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several other
species
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' food resources or living environments are destroyed.
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, prioritizing the protection of kinds has crucial significance for the whole ecosystem. Regarding other vital environmental
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, global warming is one of the most dangerous that both affects the direct expectancy of humanity and leads to a significant decrease in the number of wild nature.
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the investigation
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Colombia University in 2021, in the USA and Canada frequency of forest fear has increased 2.8 times in the
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2 decades. The base on
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number it is seeable that the lungs of the Earth were damaged more by weather conditions.
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the ozone layer is in a more perilous situation across the globe.
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, the
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of
species
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of wild nature
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arises from forest fear which is the result of global warming. In conclusion, the extinct of certain
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is a more alert issue as explained above,
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, there are more serious ecological situations
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as global warming which affect the entire ecosystems including humans, and I think prioritising other environmental
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' solves could help to cope with extinct of particular
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and maximize future secure of the whole wild world.
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The essay addresses both aspects of the question, discussing both the loss of species and global warming, and presents an overall opinion, which is well-rounded.
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Good use of studies and statistics to support arguments, such as the investigation by Columbia University, demonstrates an understanding of the topic and strengthens the argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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