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Some people believe the purpose of prison is to punish, while other would argue that rehabilitation is its primary role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that society has to lock and isolate those who do not respect the laws, while others think that a program which includes reintegration in society is much appropriate for those
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the integration is a better solution, the punishment could lead to other disorders. Nowadays, the crime rate is increasing day by day.Young
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 tend to become thieves at an early age and
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 is because of the lack of education or of poverty.The government should be more implicated in
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's life and implement some programs to help them.The society seems to be more implicated in judgement and less implicated in finding a solution.
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, is more simple to build a
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 compared to ensure a decent level of life and education.
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 should be a place of rehabilitation
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not a place where some
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 should spend time and be punished for something.In some circumstances violence lead to violence and because of that we do not have to punish anyone for their mistakes, we have to learn those
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 to understand the difference between good and bad.Government has an important role in
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 sense,better laws and rules could lead to a decrease of infractions.
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 who can not be rehabilitated.For those
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 the only option is
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rison.The privation of freedom is already a punishment.
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 punishment depends on the situation and the gravity of the infarction. To conclude
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 is preferred to try to rehabilitate a person and not to publish,but in some circumstances
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some
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 have to spend their entire life in
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a
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 has a double role, to rehabilitate and in some circumstances to punish.
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