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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT CHILDREN SHOULD NOT BE GIVEN HOMEWORK EVERY DAY, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT THEY MUST GET HOMEWORK EVERY DAY IN ORDER TO BE SUCCESSFUL AT SCHOOL. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

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Many people assume that kids ought to get
homework
 to be successful at school, while a few think that juveniles should not be given
homework
 on daily basis.
Homework
 inculcates a sense of discipline since childhood while it is more crucial to provide autonomy for decision making and think creatively. Some argue that
children
 can be disciplined with the help of providing
homework
 regularly. Up to a certain extent,
this
 is true because
homework
 forces kids to follow a routine. In
this
 manner, they will turn into responsible adults once they grow up and lead a more fruitful
life
. As per the survey conducted by the Education Ministry of India, 34% of
children
 who get
homework
 a well are able to excel more in terms of
life
 affairs as compared to those who don’t get work-related assignments from their schools. Despite
this
, I would like to argue that the development of
children
 requires autonomy to work in every aspect. In
this
 manner, they will not only become more creative but
also
 take decisions independently to deal with the daily challenges of
life
. When kids are given the freedom to do whatever they want
at
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aily basis
instead
 of following what school gives as
homework
. Following their desire to pursue things make them more creative and it is an imperative skill to learn. So, they can be ready to face
life
 challenges as they come.
For example
, homeschooling is the best way in Egypt to boost the child’s confidence as the module and curriculum are decided mutually. Creativity is crucial for an individual to learn in terms of their long-term survival. In conclusion, giving
homework
 at regular intervals at school plays an important role to lead a disciplined
life
, I think,
children
 should decide independently what they want and how they wish to study. They can develop creative thinking and able to deal with an immediate crisis during later stages of
life
.
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 VIEWS AND
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 YOUR OPINION
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