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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smacking
children
 has run out of favour as the ideal
form
 of disciplining
children
. Some people argue that physical
punishment
 is the best way to correct offsprings.
This
 essay will focus on why beating is not completely ideal in raising
children
. In ancient days hitting was the sole means of disciplining
children
. Parents were raised that way and that was the only means of
punishment
 they know. The fear of allowing their youngsters to go astray contribute to the ideology that smacking juveniles is the best mode of
discipline
.
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the lack of knowledge about alternative means of
punishment
 can limit their options and the belief that physically punishing
children
 will enable them to be better individuals in society. Due to the above-mentioned reasons,corporal
punishment
 is still considered a good
form
 of
discipline
.
Although
,
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 corporal
punishment
 is widely used in some societies, it is not the best
form
 of
punishment
. Several studies in recent years have shown that corporal
punishment
 instils fear in
children
, which eventually results in rebellious behaviour in adolescence. The percentage of persons in penitentiaries that claim to have been physically abused is gradually increasing and there is a thin demarcation between physical
punishment
 and physical abuse which is considered illegal. Alternative forms of retribution have proven to significantly effective in disciplining
children
, like implementing timeout for young
children
 or withholding pleasurable items from adolescents. The use of diverse forms of
discipline
 in accordance with the age of the child is the best
form
 of correction.
This
 essay argued why smacking is not the best
form
 of correction. In my opinion, physical
punishment
 should be used in moderation and in conjunction with other forms of
discipline
.
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