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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replacethem. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels #replacethem
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The environment is increasingly harmed by the emission of carbon dioxide via
automobiles
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,
that is
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 why many people believe that all
cars
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 that work on fossil
fuels
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 should be prohibited and totally replaced by electrical
cars
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, Personally, I believe that it is imperative that gasoline and diesel
cars
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 are replaced by environmental friendly electrical
cars
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. There is a global agreement of the harm
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 being caused by the emission of carbon dioxide
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 being released by fossil
fuels
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cars
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,
however
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,the use of
cars
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 are surging throughout the world which is why humans are encountering the most significant disaster that humans have ever had, recent
research
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 concluded that if the use of fossil
fuels
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 keep the same pattern of increasing the earth will face an unmitigated disaster by 2030 by
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 as global warming and the rise of oceans levels,
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 the electrical
cars
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 should be used more and the use of gasoline
cars
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 should be diminished. Electrical
cars
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 have proven to be unharmful to the climate and significantly effective,
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, it is unaffordable at present,
this
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 problem can be solved by implementing more
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 to improve the quality and decrease the price,
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, governments should subsidise all
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 about electrical
cars
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,
moreover
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, they should enact laws that urge citizen to buy electrical
cars
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 and
also
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 start using environmental friendly
automobiles
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 to work for the government, so it is clear that electrical
cars
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 can totally substitute normal
cars
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 in the foreseeable future. To conclude,
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 electrical
automobiles
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 are expensive and not available everywhere, by more
research
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 and enacting laws they can completely replace fossil
fuels
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automobiles
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.
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