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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replacethem. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels #replacethem
The environment is increasingly harmed by the emission of carbon dioxide via
automobiles
,
that is
 why many people believe that all
cars
 that work on fossil
fuels
 should be prohibited and totally replaced by electrical
cars
, Personally, I believe that it is imperative that gasoline and diesel
cars
 are replaced by environmental friendly electrical
cars
. There is a global agreement of the harm
that is
 being caused by the emission of carbon dioxide
that is
 being released by fossil
fuels
cars
,
however
,the use of
cars
 are surging throughout the world which is why humans are encountering the most significant disaster that humans have ever had, recent
research
 concluded that if the use of fossil
fuels
 keep the same pattern of increasing the earth will face an unmitigated disaster by 2030 by
such
 as global warming and the rise of oceans levels,
thus
 the electrical
cars
 should be used more and the use of gasoline
cars
 should be diminished. Electrical
cars
 have proven to be unharmful to the climate and significantly effective,
however
, it is unaffordable at present,
this
 problem can be solved by implementing more
research
 to improve the quality and decrease the price,
therefore
, governments should subsidise all
research
 about electrical
cars
,
moreover
, they should enact laws that urge citizen to buy electrical
cars
 and
also
 start using environmental friendly
automobiles
 to work for the government, so it is clear that electrical
cars
 can totally substitute normal
cars
 in the foreseeable future. To conclude,
although
 electrical
automobiles
 are expensive and not available everywhere, by more
research
 and enacting laws they can completely replace fossil
fuels
automobiles
.
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