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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Everybody needs to know about some sort of skills, which they need
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 when became a mother or a father. Some of them believe
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ecome a good
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 believe, Becoming a good
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 it is good to learn from your mother and father rather than reading a book or attending
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a seminar. For
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example, 1 research
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children
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However
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the skills and abilities needed for becoming a
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Among
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parents
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 to be a good
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 and other is that he or she needs to be pretty good at analysing the children. For
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niversity of Melbourne suggest that 75% of youngsters
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 well-being and keep
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Even though
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learn it from your own experiences and it will be
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