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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #prisoners #community #work #bars
Community work has been used by the Authorities as a penalty over the
last
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decade
. Some people believe that few identified criminals should be put into volunteering social work
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instead
 of
puting
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putting
 them into the prison. In
this
 regards, I totally partially with the
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 statement,
Firstly
, they could be involved
into
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 the country's economy, and take advantage out of it. To explain more, prisoners should have trained in
to
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several areas
such
 as crafting items for tourists. For
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 example, in
srilanka
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Srilanka
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 prisoners who have punished for traffic offences needs to spend 14 hours of time to make vases which
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 for tourists. Overall, it could be a huge advantage for the country’s financial statement as well as, offenders
also
 get great
exploser
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exposure
 to another industry. On other hand, Volunteering works for the
communitiy
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community
 is not
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hard enough for some extend, and they will not take the punishment seriously and it is not justified the
victime
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victim
victims
 of the crime.
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Further
 more, it is good way grant a punishment for offenders who
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 done crimes which are not serious, but it is not a
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sufficient
 way to give offenders who done serious crimes because
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 it
is encourage
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 them to engage with crimes again in future. For
a
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instance, One research paper from Australia suggested that 80%
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criminals tend to repeat the crime if they are not
loked
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looked
locked
located
 in the prison. In
conclution
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conclusion
, It is always
genarates
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generates
generated
 income for Authorities by getting unpaid works from the prisoners, but
also
panelties
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penalties
 should
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 to adjust according to the crime they have done and always should justify the
victimes
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victims
.
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