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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, it is usually considered that the main target of the
government
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 has to be economic growth. Despite
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 fact, a certain part of citizens thinks that there are other things, which have the same level of importance, that authority should take into consideration.   On the one hand, the
government
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 has to concentrate all its actions on the progress related to the economy of the country.
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 is because not only does it help a region to become more competitive but
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 it increases an average income level.
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, the number of exports increases that enables a country to sell its products and,
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, life conditions are improved because of an  increase in salaries.
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, the UK has the strongest economy what, in turn, increases opportunities for citizens. 
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, there are more crucial things an authority should think about
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 as equality among people.
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 is because when there is a lack of
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 control and intervention some huge companies could easily become monopolies and begin to rule the market.
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, citizens might be divided into different groups in the regard to their income and power that, in turn,leads to inequality.
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, there is a considerable amount of monopolies in Ukraine that create a large gap between people with a high and a low level of income.   To conclude, I am firmly convinced that the
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 should focus on economic progress in order to increase the number of opportunities within a country and make it more competitive in the world.And
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 drawbacks as inequality might be decreased by various laws and regulations that, in turn, will control the overall condition of the market.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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