IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

You have a friend who has always liked the car you currently drive. Now you have decided to sell the car. You think your friend might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, say why you want to sell your car describe the condition of the car invite the friend to come and see the car himself/herself someday Write at least 150 words.

#friend #car #drive #condition
Hi Erick, How are you doing? I hope you and your family are doing well, I'd like you to know that my
car
 is for
sell
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sale
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 now. Actually, I want to inform you because you liked it so much, and you told me that when the day
come
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comes
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 to sell
this
car
, you must be the first one to know.
Firstly
, I have a plan to buy a new home,
therefore
, I need to save some cash for
this
.
Although
 my wife suggested taking a loan from the bank, I said that selling
this
car
 would be a better and faster solution.
Moreover
, I'm eager to buy a new model in the near future.
Secondly
, you have seen my
car
 many times before,
hence
, I assure you that its condition is perfect and it will suit you, the engine, the
tires
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tyres
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, and the structure are working properly without a single problem. I'd like to invite you to come over and check on it by yourself. With love, Marco
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea. The second paragraph mingled reasons for selling the car and future plans, which could be separated for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to improve flow between sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the overall cohesion of the letter.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout; the letter mostly achieves this, but some informal language is mixed with formal phrases. Choose one tone and stick to it for consistency.
task achievement
Address all the prompts provided by the question thoroughly; expand on the description of the car to better meet the task requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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