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Do you think that technological advancement has brought more harm than good? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#advancement #harm #support
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technological development
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 been observed to be growing at a rapid speed. I think
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notwithstanding
 the cons, these up-gradations has brought more comfort into the life of mankind. In
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Firstly
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nvention of automated
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 has helped in reducing the labour work in manufacturing industries. To illustrate, nowadays we can see
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ajority of factories have installed latest
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ask which was previously done by labours.
Besides
this
, it has
also
 provided relaxation in doing household chores.
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, since I have a washing machine and a dishwasher at my home, I do not have to do my house-work manually and I can get them done using these automated technologies.
Furthermore
, these technical innovations have
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 in saving time.
That is
 to say, with the constant development in the field of technology we can now perform most of our task at a quicker pace. To exemplify, inventions
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 as automobiles, bullet trains, aeroplanes are some of the advanced
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 of transportation which have become popular for the speed and comfort they offer. To conclude, the up-gradation in the tech sector has certainly brought more favours to us in the form of system-generated
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 and efficient technologies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Job automation
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Productivity
  • Job displacement
  • Unemployment
  • Diagnostic tools
  • Patient care
  • Privacy
  • Data security
  • Genetic modification
  • Renewable energy
  • Resource efficiency
  • Electronic waste
  • Carbon footprint
  • Pollution
  • Social media
  • Cyberbullying
  • Digital addiction
  • Digital divide
  • Misinformation
  • Democratized access
  • Face-to-face interactions
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