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Some people think movies should only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days the cinema is the best past time for all age groups of
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ommunity. Recent times public think of a film as the best source of entertainment
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 and tries to imitate or follow their favourite actors or actress from the movies they have watched. In my view, movies should
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society and well being of people.
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 subconsciously impacts on the person watching it. As the people watching the
movie
 tend to be more focused on the story plot and well connects with the scenes as there`s no distraction, in some of the theatres people asked to even switched off their mobiles while watching
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ovie.It is observed there could be some sort of
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hange in the mindset of
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rowd after watching the
movie
 tend to be influenced by society.Most of the public connect well if the picture scenes are piled up interesting to the audience. Commercial success can be achieved
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tory with gripped screenplay has educational
values
. Families want to spend good time with their kids watching movies, that could add value to their children educational growth. It is observed there is a significant positive impact on the students watching the flick with moral
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avourite pastime, and many families will work unitedly for their livelihood and it will be a financial risk for the producers to handle better as
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 could lead to loss and may impact families worked together for the picture. In conclusion, I could say incorporating educational
values
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calculated risk to be taken by the producer, as
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 could be a huge loss if script not handled properly.
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