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Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some says that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that education should be availed
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free of cost to all courses by the government;
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 others believe
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 should not be the case.
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, the high level of literacy
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 free learning and;
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 maximum funds
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 a particular area may impact other progress of the country. In my view, free access should be limited only to primary schooling. Providing free education for all the classes to the students helps in getting the entire population educated. Especially, youth are the assets of the country, and investing in their higher courses will definitely result in the
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 improvement of the nation. If schooling is free, not only parents can be burden-free but
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 the youth can acquire knowledge without any burden. To exemplify
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, in many European countries like Germany and Denmark, learning is free for all the classes to all its citizens. Acquiring free study is the right of every child at these places. Undoubtedly, it is important, but providing free high-level studies requires huge funds for the government. Allotting, more money in
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 field may hamper the improvement of the agricultural sector, infrastructure, industrial growth, health facilities and many more.
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 of these areas will definitely result in higher costs of basic essential commodities. To illustrate
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, in countries like the United States of
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 the inflation level is always high. Because the governing authorities provide free access to many facilities by inducing heavy taxes on its denizens.
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favour of the latter statement, because expending the money of taxpayers
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 a particular sector will damage the nation's growth.
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 free education improves the rate of literacy, it is only feasible for developed countries. Developing nations cannot spend significantly on
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 its drawbacks.
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,
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 of spending
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 it, the authorities must focus more on the
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 evolution of the nation.
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