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“In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.” Do you agree or disagree?

#“in #twenty #years #cars
Most
people
 agree that
cars
 are essential and take part for society. Particularly, I recon in the near future there will be many
cars
 than today. I completely agree with these claim for tree reasons:
urbanization
,
second
 increase the
technology
 and
third
 inability of public
transport
.
First
 of all, the developing world is rapidly urbanizing, which means that more and more
people
 there will be drive to theirs for workplace.
For example
, the city which I live is constant build up, the major built several bridges and long roads. After those constructions the ancient track doesn`t exist any more, so I have to
use
 my car to arrive in my company. The
urbanization
 has had a role important in our life.
Furthermore
, with the build up of the
urbanization
, the
technology
 follow these growth.
For example
, usually has had news about electric
cars
 between us, how
people
 using more and more theirs
cars
, the industry created
cars
 moved by common electricity, it is amazing since price of the gas increase each six months, but
this
cars
 still pretty expensive.
Also
, we must to talk about how functional is public
transport
.
For instance
, I live in Brazil, when has colossal cities, more specific I have lived in Petrolina, when the temperature while the year is scald. There is not subways, only busses ( busses that has been rebuild and modernized).
However
, these vehicle there is not AC (conditioning air) so is almost impossible
use
 public
transport
 offer by town hall. In the final analysis, increased to
use
 of
cars
 will be remarkable in the
next
 twenty years. Because it is impossible fight against the spread the
urbanization
 and
technology
. Unfortunately, the public
transport
 doesn´t follow up the
technology
, in Petrolina. So, more and more
people
 will be
use
 theirs
cars
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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