The increase in tourism has led to the destruction of the environment, thus tourism ought to be banned in certain areas. What is your opinion?

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It is argued by many people that certain tourist sites should be banned as they are being badly affected by the increasing number of tourists.
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notion and discuss both views in detail with valid reasons and suitable examples.
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with, many beautiful places invites the heavy traffic of tourist to enjoy their quality time close to the mother earth but their presence disturbs nature very badly. To add to
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, many hotels set up the infrastructure right in between
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nature to provide the best views to their clients which lead to the deforestation and the killing of many rare species.
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, heavy traffic causes pollution in the region and the filth of packaged food.
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, as per the reports by Hindustan Times, Shimla witnessed the increase of pollution by 40% in the winter of 2019.
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, the total ban in these areas will lead to the financial crisis as
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is the only source of income for the people of these regions.
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, I believe
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of baning the tourists, the government must regulate the number of visitors by issuing the limited passes.
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, authorities must issue the advisory for tourists to follow some basic guidelines to protect the wildlife. As per the statistics from the government of Himachal Pardesh, 80% of the total revenue in the region in the year 2019 is generated from
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, baning
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will not serve the purpose. To conclude,
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, an increase in
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may affect the environment but I believe a total ban will not be the permanent solution.
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