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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Global warming has become a huge problem for life on Earth. A few people believe that rather than stopping
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, we should adopt
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 reversal. I disagree with
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 statement at a great extent.
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 with the argument, many of us think that we should go with
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 and search
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 to live in these harsh conditions. They might think
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 because it is impossible to stop
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 in the environment due to some inevitable human activities and requirements.
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, our civilization cannot stop using vehicles and industrial productions,
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 it is not possible to stop their bad effect on the environment.
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, greenhouse gases production continues
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intoxicating
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 environment.
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 it is difficult to curb all types of pollution level due to technological advancement;
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, Its better to adopt living with
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 harsh reality of environmental conditions.
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, I partially agree with
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 side of argument and efforts to minimize
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 bad impact would be better than just put your hand on hand and watch it. In
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 way,bad consequences could be timid and of course,
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 would be beneficial for all the living entities on
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 beautiful planet. In conclusion, though it is really difficult to stop
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 transition completely due to scientific exploration, the
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 can minimize it by avoiding unnecessary activities which are not vital.
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 why I disagree at a large extent with the statement that rather than curbing
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 people should seek
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 to survive on the earth. I would suggest finding other alternatives to reduce the negative effect of our deed for the betterment of coming generations.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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