It is common for people to travel long distances for work and study.Some argue that longer commute times negatively affect people while others disagree.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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mandatory for everyone to reach their workplaces and schools physically to make activities more effective.So,students and workers are used to with moving long journey
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to reach their
work place
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.It is considered that commuting for a long period of
time
has negative aspects on traveller
however
some of the masses
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it in a positive way.
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First
and foremost,in
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21st era,every individual
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limited
time
with them.
This
means
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they should complete several
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in a fraction of
time
in a proper way.If their
appartment
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apartment
is far away from their workplace or educational institute
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,it will consume their quality
time
which they could spend on their personal activities.
For instance
,students of the rural areas aren’t getting enough
time
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study due to the lack of schools in their locality.
On the other hand
,nowadays folks are
prefering
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preferring
to move abroad for
further
study and overseas business because of their travelling passion.
In other words
,those who
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to get rid of household matters are trying to move apart from their house to make themselves rejuvenated from their hectic routine.
This
tendency in people is helping them to improve their mental as well as physical health.In our remittance dependent country,most of the population are found to be doing any sorts of activity in
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oreign country
instead
there are many opportunities in their own homeland. In conclusion,it is more
time
consuming for those having a little
time
to commute far places for various purposes
however
some people takes
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ong journey as a tour where they remain free from their household works.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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