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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, some of the culture centres like
museums
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 ask
people
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 to buy tickets whereas the rest do not cost
money
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. In my opinion, there are more benefits over drawbacks when
museums
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 are free. On the one hand, a larger number of
people
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 will come to visit these culture and
arts
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 centres when the ticket is free of charge.
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,
people
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 who don't have a lot of
money
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 would have more opportunities to enjoy
arts
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 if they did not have to pay for the entrance.
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, culture and art appreciation should not be used as a method to make profits because it belongs to everyone
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 as locals, tourists, students, and children even if it can help to boost the local economy.
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, charging for tickets can increase their revenue to improve their service quality but it can largely decrease the number of visitors.
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, a lot of
people
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 do not have an interest in
arts
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, so they won't spend their
money
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 on
museums
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, especially if they have to pay out of their pockets.
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, those with low salaries or no salaries,
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 as street artists or the homeless, love
arts
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 but they cannot afford the ticket.
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 tourists might be willing to pay to go to the
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, a lot of them are just wondering what it looks like inside
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 of understanding the meanings behind the art. In conclusion, there are more pros when
museums
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 are free of cost than cons. Local artists,
people
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 with low salary and the homeless will have the chance to appreciate
arts
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,
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 tourists'
money
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 can help with the economy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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