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The internet is viewed as an excellent means of communication by many. However, there are others who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#internet #communication #skills
Nowadays
people
 want to spend more
time
 on the
internet
instead
 of going out and collaborate with each other. Do we really need to think that the
internet
 is an excellent means of
communication
 or it is destroying our
skills
 of
communication
? According to me, usage of
internet
 by individually help either build or make weaken their collaboration
skills
. In
this
 task, I would like to discuss both sides and give my opinion for an
internet
 that how it should be wish or curse to the
communication
skills
 of
people
.
I
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nternet plays a vital role in
this
 technological era over the world wide.
Internet
 should be a blessing for those
people
 who are living far away from their close one and way out from their goals.
Although
people
 live at any point of the world can communicate easily with each other by using so many kinds of software and applications like WhatsApp, Facebook, Twitter and so many social media sites.
Moreover
,
people
 can share their thoughts, and professionally communicating and doing business by using Zoom, LinkedIn kind of app.
For example
, zoom meetings and LinkedIn
communication
 build person abilities, and an easy way of
communication
 over the world wide respectively.
However
, some of the
people
 using the
internet
 for fun and wasting their
time
 by gaming, extra using of social media site for surfing, chattings.
On the other hand
,
people
 are using the
internet
 for their convenience and enjoyment. Because of the Gaming, scrolling, watching movies and extra unnecessary
internet
 consumption, which can waste
time
 and even destroy their
communication
skills
. For illustrate, adult and children mostly working on the social media site for games and chattings
instead
 of positive usage of it and gain some kind of knowledge or share thoughts by communicating with each other. With the sum up of all the thoughts and point of views, I strongly believe that the
internet
 is a worship of God in
this
time
 phase. As I discussed previously, we can make our
communication
skills
 at the excellent stage by using it in a positive way
instead
 of by making it a source of enjoyment.
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