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Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illnesses and diseases and not enough on health education and prevention. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The emerging of illnesses and diseases has become a matter of concern across the world. In order to tackle that issue, governments spend a lot of
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 to cure and save
people
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's lives and some may see that the governments give too much
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 only to cure
people
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's, but in
health
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 education and its prevention.
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, in
this
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 essay, I would like to explain the reasons why I support that idea and
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, provide a plausible conclusion.
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 with, as the number of
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, who get sick, are increasing, the doctors and nurses need the helper tools to get the diagnose as soon as possible and
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 to prevent the illness becomes worse. It means the
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 must involve providing cutting-edge
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 machinery.
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 advance innovation costs a lot of
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 than the traditional one.
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, the old glucose meter with a needle in it only takes less than $10 in Indonesia, but the bio-sensor glucose meter costs about more than $50. That means if the Indonesia
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 provides that sophisticated equipment all over Indonesia, it charges more on treating
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 than its action to prevent some illnesses or diseases.
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, I believe that the civilians take part in it. As long as I have known, our lifestyle influences our
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. The
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 has conducted many seminars talking about healthy lifestyle and how to maintain our body system.
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, our bad habits, especially in maintaining our organ system, are not easy to change.
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, even though they know it is bad, they still do it.
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, smoking may promote lung cancer and other breathing impairment, but
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, who addict to it, will still use it no matter the cost it takes.
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, it is very useless for the
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 to give much
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 on prevention if citizens always use their own desire and free will over their
health
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. In a nutshell, the sophisticated helper tools that help those
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 practitioners and citizens behaviour towards their well-being cause the authority to put too much cash on treating
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 from diseases and illness.
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, I would reiterate my opinion that
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 statement is true and I agree with that.

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