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Some people think certain prisoner should be made unpaid work instead of being put behind bar .. discus it with your own opinion.

#people #prisoner #work #bar #discus
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Some would argue that
people
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 who commit a major crime should not go to
jail
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 but made to
work
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 without any salary. While putting serious offenders in
jail
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 ensures the safety of
people
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, I believe that force them into some voluntary
work
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 help them gain skills that they use and get a
job
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 upon their release from prison. On the one hand, some believe men and women who are in prisons are security threats for other
people
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.
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 many of them have been put into
jail
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 because they have murdered someone or they are behind the bars because they have broken the law or injured other
people
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 of the society,
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, they should be locked up in solitary confinements and not let go outside.
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,
people
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 got panicked after the Jang Newspaper reported that 25 serial killers broke out from Karachi Central
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.
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, I believe that they must be given some tasks in the prison to develop some skills so they could get a
job
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 when their terms end and live a normal life.
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, others think criminals should be forced to do some
work
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 while they are in the facility. In the United States women,prisoners are asked to do some creative
work
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,
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 as content writing, teaching, and other kinds of stuff. It should be made mandatory for the
people
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 who are in
jail
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 that they must choose one of the skills to develop so when get released they could live a normal life.
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, a program on the XC channel revealed that 43% of women prisoners in Bangladesh got a
job
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 as soon as they got released from
jail
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 in 2018. I believe it is a more productive way to treat a criminal while they are in the prison. In conclusion,
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people
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 who have committed a major crime are a serious threat to the society, I believe that they must be given to some
work
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 so they would find a
job
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 upon their release from the
jail
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 and get not involved in any illegal activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prison system
  • Rehabilitative justice
  • Unpaid work
  • Community service
  • Recidivism
  • Exploitation
  • Incarceration
  • Labor
  • Deterrence
  • Public safety
  • Oversight
  • Rehabilitation
  • Punishment
  • Ethical concerns
  • Practical considerations
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