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In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree.

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For people who are, at least, concerned, it is easy to search the Internet and discover web pages containing articles discussing the education system. The point of view supposes that nowadays parents all over the world might choose which school
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 as single-sex or co-education prefer for their children. The opinion considers that same-gender
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 might affect badly the children's future. I am inclined to think that
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 idea reflects my point of view, and I am going to represent it by my essay. Some recent surveys done by leading sociologists have shown that over the
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 decades there have been some changes in global education tendencies. One trend seems to be becoming increasingly common: we can trace the tendency by the significant reduction of single-sex
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 in modern society. There is no doubt,
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 kind of
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 influence on the communication ability between both gender, which might decrease the confidence, and
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, deteriorates the range of future marriages or, even, increases violence or crimes.
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, more than 90 % of all
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 in Russia are co-education. Whereas
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 state of affairs might trigger some objections of the people who are persuaded that single-sex
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 help to improve concentration among students. It is commonly said that the military
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 should be single-sex to create special conditionals for study.
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, numerous financial or social extents could arise. To conclude, my belief is absolutely convincing,
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, it is supported by my own experience since I am a former student. The most reasonable way might be to accept the benefits of the co-education
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 which I reflected in my essay.
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