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Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

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 can expect to live longer and healthier.
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elderly
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 are desired to contribute to their communities after retirement. In
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, take K.P technical school in the case in Taipei. The school have invited many seniors master Chef or manager, who have higher technical and plenty of hospitality industry experience to have a lecture every year, in order that they can be sharing the experience and teaching the cooking skill to the
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, that have much older generation will joint some social services organisation to assist disabled
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 or donation of hospices etc.
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, Lion club is one of the significant non-policies international services organisation. After My mother retired she had become one of the members of them and they will do various sort of the service project to the local communities include charitable donation or blood donation for the hospitals. To conclusions, due to most elderly
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 are lived longer and healthier than
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 still can use their power to contribute to the local communities
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