Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

Needless to say, in
this
modern-day as our medical technical advances, many
people
can expect to live longer and healthier.
However
, most
the
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elderly
people
are desired to contribute to their communities after retirement. In
this
essay,I will endeavour to outline several ways which can give benefit to society. To commence with, most of the older generation can sharing their valuable experience and life stories to other younger employees or school students .
For instance
, take K.P technical school in the case in Taipei. The school have invited many seniors master Chef or manager, who have higher technical and plenty of hospitality industry experience to have a lecture every year, in order that they can be sharing the experience and teaching the cooking skill to the
next
generation.
Moreover
, that have much older generation will joint some social services organisation to assist disabled
people
or donation of hospices etc.
For example
, Lion club is one of the significant non-policies international services organisation. After My mother retired she had become one of the members of them and they will do various sort of the service project to the local communities include charitable donation or blood donation for the hospitals. To conclusions, due to most elderly
people
are lived longer and healthier than
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ast, indeed. So
that is
to say, those
people
still can use their power to contribute to the local communities
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