Team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are played alone. Do you agree or disagree?
Some argue that people will learn more important life
skills
through group activities
rather than those who do anything by themselves. This
essay agrees with this
statement because a professional working setting improves its members' collaboration skills
and doing activities
together will nurture their sense of sympathy.
First and foremost, a group setting allows the members to improve their collaboration skills
. This
is because, in real work experience, there will be group projects and to successfully execute these projects they have to join hand in hand. Every team
member will have to participate and do their portion. It will be difficult to successfully hold a project without team
members’ participation thus
everyone involved in these should collaborate. For example
, in Shopee, before they launch a campaign, units such
as the marketing team
and IT team
should communicate with each other to smoothly carry out the program.
Moreover
, doing activities
together with
others
will nurture their empathy. This
is because interacting and spending time together allow them to develop a closer relationship. They begin to learn about each other, and when their member faces difficulty, the others
will voluntarily offer their hands. This
shows that they develop sympathy towards their teammates and are eager to help. This
skill is important as an adult in the middle of society. For instance
, people are more caring towards others
who have a connection with them. If a natural disaster happens, they are willing to share and help each other within the community.
In conclusion, team
activities
allow people to develop collaborative skills
and sympathy towards others
which is important for life.Submitted by intanannisa.ia on
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