Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that juvenile
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to do social
work
free of cost during their spare
time
this
may be fruitful for them along with
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society
. It is true that in our
society
there are ample of things which still need lots of improvement and take care.
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, I do not agree with the statement and I would like to discuss
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easons for that. The cardinal reason behind
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this
is that kind of voluntary
work
divert their mind from studies and it might be creating pressure on them. Today juvenile has tremendous
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their academics activities. Today we have been living in the revolutionary and technological advance era where knowledge is everything where academic performance
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rucial role
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their
further
professions as well as occupations. So that’s why they have to spend as much as
time
for their curriculum activity and give priority to them. Another concern is that in free
time
they could
also
develop new hobbies and interest
such
as various sports and other creative hobbies like painting, singing and so on which could be beneficial them explore new
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and increase social bonding and emotion. It is an undeniable truth that youth can help themselves and their neighbourhood by involving in some kind of voluntary task when they have spare
time
. The main reason is they can get lucrative experience and skills
such
as discipline, co-ordination and many social manners which may they will
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enefit for their
further
occupation and personal as much as social life.
Moreover
,
society
gets benefits though
this
work
, because these jobs might never be undertaken in unprivileged
society
and it will create
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ealthy and ideal
society
. After discussing the matter in details, social
work
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atter of fact that
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that youth should not be
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force
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to do unpaid
work
because they have
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ot to do for their education as well as
further
career prospects.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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