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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your argument with examples and relevant evidence.

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Nowadays, due to globalisation
students
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option to complete their higher studies not only in their own nation but
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 any place of the world. So, it has
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wn merits and demerits. Education is inevitable and foundation part of our life. In
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I will shape on both points with valid points. To commence, there are numbers of benefits
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better quality training as well as careers.
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, when
students
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 select
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oreign university for higher studies, they
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not only degree there but many more thing
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 as language and value, new techniques and program. They can more adaptive knowledge and skill which will help in their careers as well as for their country which can improve
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rowth of economy and pattern of work.
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 because they get
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andsome reward, higher post as well as preference priority while job selection and promotion events.
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 many Indian entrepreneurs start up their ventures after they had been studying and working in
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oreign university and company. On
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ontrary side, there are few drawbacks
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 as when
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 who prefer foreign country their home and settle down there.
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, many Indian
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 who went
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America for their higher studies
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then
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 have been working in many domestic as well as reputed company and national agencies
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 as IBM, Goggle, NASA and many more. These causes their own community get not benefits of their talent and loss valuable human resources which may fruitful other community get their richness of knowledge and skill. In conclusion, there are both
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 and drawbacks to studying foreign countries. The main strength is that student
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 to learn
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ot of new things while studying abroad whereas weakness is that they choose to stay there after the study
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 fail to contribute to its development in their community.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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