Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The world has been experiencing a great number of

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committed by mostly teenagers.

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situation is quite alarming as mentioned by certain experts in psychology. From my perspective, while other social factors may be to blame the situation could get worse If young people can't acquire the right civic education. On the one hand, I would agree that

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’ less concern about their children is due to long working hours. In

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contemporary society, both

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earn the living and spend 8 or even more hours at work which curtails the time for interaction between

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and their teenagers, precluding youngsters from getting basic emotion like affection from adults.

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, if one wants to share either his disappointment or anxiety with

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who might have no time for him, he tends to vent the anger by violating other people.

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, in the technology era, people, including

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are more likely to focus on smartphones, computers or TV rather than their duties to raise children properly.

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, external influences

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as media, availability of drugs and peer pressure

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contribute to the rise in crime rates. When commercials and movies glorify smoking and drinking, the youth often gets curious and experiment with these stimulants. They,

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, end up getting intoxicated and

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allows the higher chances of committing

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, thanks to advanced technology, young children can play violent

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with extremely clear screens.

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has drastically encouraged children’s violent behaviour in the real world. According to the recent report in Japan, about 80 per cent of teenagers responded to

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or computer

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were the most inspiring for them to make

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. To conclude, I believe that not only little parental guidance, but other factors

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as drugs and

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result in juvenile

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Topic Vocabulary:

Aggression
Conflict resolution
Empathy
Parental guidance
Socio-economic factors
Media influence
Peer pressure
Social acceptance
Violent crime
Youngsters
Anti-social behavior
Socialization
Emotional intelligence
Psychological development
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