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The number of advertisements for charities on television and the Internet seems to be increasing. What is causing this? Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#advertisements #charities #television #internet #development
In the present world, the usage of the Internet is universal, which is convenient and easy for transporting
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information. Under
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 circumstance, the little-known facts are widely spread,
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 as charities. From my perspective, I believe
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 is due to improvement in human’ s moral disciplines and it is a positive advancement. On the one hand, the main reason for the growth in a number of advertisements for charities on television and the Internet is that there is an increase in people’s sense of duty. As more folks are aware of not everyone
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 the same life,
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rowd who concern social responsibilities tend to help the public with lower income, but one’s power is limited, so the emergence of that kind of advertisement is avoidable for the purpose of increasing more people’s consciousness and gathering their power to give hand to the vulnerable groups.
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, I personally reckon
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 situation is a positive development because it can illustrate ideology is improving. In the ancient,
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ommunity were more likely to be selfish that could be shown by an autocratic monarchy.
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, the society that we live in right now is more democratic and harmonious, which means the vulnerable group will not be ignored and exploited. population nowadays consider social obligation more than before, which is beneficial for the development of the human culture that will become more flourishing because everybody enjoys better living standards. In conclusion, I believe the rise in the
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 of public service announcements is mainly due to increasing mentality of social responsibility, and it is a rewarding improvement which benefits the whole development of all people around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nonprofit organization
  • crowdfunding
  • philanthropy
  • altruism
  • donor fatigue
  • corporate social responsibility
  • social media influence
  • charitable giving
  • sponsorship
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • awareness campaign
  • digital marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • fundraising
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