The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart illustrates the amount of
electricity
which was used for
the
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production
and consumption by
top
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the top
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ten countries (
China
, United States , Russia , Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany,
Korea
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and Korea
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) in 2014.
Overall
,
China
ranks first for the consumption and
production
of
electricity
,
moreover
, the lowest amount is used and produced by the country
Korea
.
Additionally
, Russia was nearly equal in the
production
and consumption of
electricity
. In 2014 ,
China
was ahead of all the countries in
production
which was 5,398 billion
kWh
and
also
, for the usage of
electricity
which was 5,322 billion
kWh
. The lowest amount of
electricity
consumed is by the country
Korea
which is 455.8 billion
kWh
,
moreover
,
electricity
which
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was produced by Germany in a minority which is about 526.6 . There was not a quite difference between the usage and manufacturing of
electricity
by the country Russia which was about 19
kWh
and
similarly
this
was with countries
such
as
China
and
Korea
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, china, korea, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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