We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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help
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us to work
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easier as a task can be completed
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immediately
and accurate.
An adoption
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of technology like
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Internet
deliver so many benefits.
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strongly agree that the usage of
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nternet
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able to provide advantages. The
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had provides
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substantial
benefit because the information searching become fast and precise.
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university students require to use
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nternet to find
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nswer for their assignments and without the usage of the
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the students may not able to obtain the best possible answer for their assignments.
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nternet not only regards to find
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people
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to conducted online meeting and online call. These approaches help
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to manage a meeting without physically attend
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a meeting location.
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, the use of application widely known as google meeting help
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meet
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via
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online.
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that, the
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lead
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to
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mergence of online shopping. The online shopping sell
everthing
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everything
that provide more items to select and compare than
a physical shops
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.
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to acquire many options to purchase and execute price
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comparison
.
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internet
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allows
people
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to browse news from other countries which make
people
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aware
about
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the current situation
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happened
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in that country.
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state election and financial status. The usage of the
internet
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lead
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to the emergence of e-sport
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mobile legend, which make
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to plays with many
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regardless of location.
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nternet help
people
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to acquire online education. Nowadays online education became a new norm for
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to obtain knowledge compare than
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meeting.
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platfrom
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platform
opted by many knowledge
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due to it is
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fast and easy to learn
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compare than the
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traditional
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nternet has many advantages as it
help
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people
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to gain stuff and information much easier. In future, it is expected that the
Internet
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help
people
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to obtain many
benefit
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form different type of angle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • digital banking
  • cybersecurity
  • data protection
  • security breaches
  • cyber attacks
  • online transactions
  • digital divide
  • surveillance
  • freedom of information
  • responsible usage
  • ethical considerations
  • digital footprints
  • online behavior
  • information inequality
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