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today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
There is not even an otha of doubt that, the living standard in metropolises
cities
 are decreasing day by day.There are many reasons behind it like,overpopulation community,contaminated
environment
,and busy traffic jams.To tackle
this
 issue
government
 has to implement some strict laws.
First
 and foremost reason is that overpopulation society.
people
 all around world migrating to big
cities
 because they think that they have more opportunities in big
cities
 as compare to the  countryside area.Due to that the
Cities
,
people
 is rising rapidly.Because of overpopulation
government
 has to build more houses and industry.It
also
 creates a traffic problem and
environment
 problem.Because car and other transport emit many dangerous gases in the
environment
 which lead to many killing diseases
for example
 cancer,tv,and many more.The good example is Delhi come in number one position in polluted
cities
 in the World.
People
 are far away in big
cities
 from fresh air and fresh food too.
Secondly
,I think that it is our joint responsibility with the
government
 to resolve these problems.
Firstly
 the
government
 should make hard rules to control the wastages of industries.They should recycle it as much as they can.Or rest they should dump on a safe place.
In addition
,
people
 and
government
 should plant more trees so that we can filter air.
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the
government
 should make high rise buildings for living
instead
 of houses so we can save our land for a forest.It is
also
 an individual responsibility that we should give priority to public transport because it is cheaper and
environment
 friendly. In conclusion,I admit that we have ample of opportunities in
cities
.But it is much better if we stay outside the city.Because
cities
 have limited space if we put too much pressure on them.it will become non-living place because of
environment
.We should safe our country and
cities
.
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