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some young people say that their mobile phone are the most important think they own. Do you think that the use of mobile phones is good. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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Nevertheless
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, cell phones are essential for future usage for
pupils
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 as well as
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. A segment of
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 belive's that electronic
gadgets
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 are the most vital gadget they own in the present world how everOthers opine that, It is harmful to
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. I would like to delve both the arguments before forming an opinion.
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 with, electronics
gadgets
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 in a present era are getting vital as they contain or usage for the
society
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 as with the internet factors, as knowledge and much more stuff, which seems
gadgets
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 attacks young
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 as well as old aged
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,
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 as knowledge and study usage for
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 ,and spiritual and cultural books and movies for old aged people's .
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 , electronic
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also
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 getting more importance, social interaction help's
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 to get in touch with relatives and friends. Hense electronic
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 are getting vital in the present era.
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, excess
use
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 of electronic
gadgets
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 are not good, it seems
pupils
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 are getting much more addicted toward
gadgets
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use
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 , which is effection their health, excess
use
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 of
gadgets
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 create the eye's contact longer with gadget's and pupil's
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 wearing
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 wear earphone, which can damage their eyesight and eardrum.
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, excess
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 of
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 effects problems.
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, playing games in the gadget and not taking interest in physical sports and studies even getting worst, which effecting both on mentally and physically health of
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.
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 excess
use
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 of
gadgets
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 creating issues. In conclusion, considering all the points mentioned above electronic
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 is useful to stay connected with
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, but
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 harmful if not
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 in limit period.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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