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Some people think that hard work helps in achieving financial success while other thing it is not lead to financial success. discuss both of use and give your opinion

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It is considered by
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ajority of
people
 that a person could be financially successful by working hard while
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 do not support
this
 idea. In
this
 essay, I will explain both the points and discuss my opinion.
To begin
 with, working hard is key to success and
people
 can get profit financially if they perform their duties with full concentration and with hard
work
.
Moreover
, working hard seems
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 an achievement for those who get promoted in their jobs and get higher wages. To illustrate, one of my friend who was working as an assistant in Subway is now a manager at Subway and he is getting paid three times more than before.
This
 was because of his tough grind
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 because he used to
work
 overtime and
also
 whenever his supervisor needs any employee in the placement of absence worker, he was always available. He focussed on
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ob, standing whole day, taking orders and delivering them.
Furthermore
, some professionals
such
 as political leaders,
work
 hard for the country. They sometimes do not have time for their families and friends and serve the country with their full attention and hard
work
 and they are financially rich.
On the other hand
, gaining higher economic wealth is not always because of hard
work
, these days many individuals who have skills,
work
 experience and who are paying their full attention
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 the career and jobs are not always wealthy. To illustrate,
people
 who
work
 as janitors, all the time they put their efforts to clean the area and during their whole shifts, they
work
 so hard. These workers still are at minimum wages in many companies.
Moreover
, discrimination, racism against different sexes, colour and genders is increasing drastically nowadays. Sometimes skilled workers who have
experiences
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 are still unable to get promoted at jobs because of their ethnicity and co-worker's behaviour towards them, so it is not always the case to be financially rich with hard
work
. In my point, it is the reality of
this
 contemporary world that hard
work
 is not connected with money, because of social issues and workplace discrimination,
people
 do not achieve what they want. To conclude, taking everything into consideration, some
people
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ood fortune can get
financially
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 success with the promotions and by working hard. I believe, discrimination and other ethnicity issues at
work
, do not lead
people
 towards success or wealth even if individuals are working hard.
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