It is considered by
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ajority of
that a person could be financially successful by working hard while
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do not support
idea. In
essay, I will explain both the points and discuss my opinion.
with, working hard is key to success and
can get profit financially if they perform their duties with full concentration and with hard
.
, working hard seems
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an achievement for those who get promoted in their jobs and get higher wages. To illustrate, one of my friend who was working as an assistant in Subway is now a manager at Subway and he is getting paid three times more than before.
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because he used to
overtime and
whenever his supervisor needs any employee in the placement of absence worker, he was always available. He focussed on
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ob, standing whole day, taking orders and delivering them.
, some professionals
as political leaders,
hard for the country. They sometimes do not have time for their families and friends and serve the country with their full attention and hard
and they are financially rich.
, gaining higher economic wealth is not always because of hard
, these days many individuals who have skills,
experience and who are paying their full attention
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the career and jobs are not always wealthy. To illustrate,
who
as janitors, all the time they put their efforts to clean the area and during their whole shifts, they
so hard. These workers still are at minimum wages in many companies.
, discrimination, racism against different sexes, colour and genders is increasing drastically nowadays. Sometimes skilled workers who have
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are still unable to get promoted at jobs because of their ethnicity and co-worker's behaviour towards them, so it is not always the case to be financially rich with hard
. In my point, it is the reality of
contemporary world that hard
is not connected with money, because of social issues and workplace discrimination,
do not achieve what they want.
To conclude, taking everything into consideration, some
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ood fortune can get
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success with the promotions and by working hard. I believe, discrimination and other ethnicity issues at
, do not lead
towards success or wealth even if individuals are working hard.