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IN A NUMBER OF COUNTRIES, SOME PEOPLE THINK IT IS NECESSARY TO SPEND LARGE SUMS OF MONEY ON CONSTRUCTING NEW RAILWAY LINES FOR FAST TRAINS BETWEEN CITIES. OTHER BELIEVS THE MONEY SHOULD BE SPENT ON IMPROVING EXISTING PUBLIC TRANSPORT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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These days, human population growth has increased the need for a better means of public transportation. Some persons believe that it is better for the
government
 to spend huge sums of
money
 in the construction of new railway lines for high-speed trains connecting
cities
, while others want the
money
 to be used to develop the already existing public transport. In
this
 essay, I will explain both sides and state my own opinion on
this
. Investing in high-speed trains will make transportation between
cities
 to be faster.
This
 is common in most of the European countries. One can be sleeping in Asaba and working in Port Harcourt. Another advantage of
this
 is that new things tend to
last
 long. The
government
 will save more in the long run as maintenance cost will reduce during
this
 period as compared to frequent repairs of an old transport
system
.
Lastly
, there will be little or no breakdown of trains as is currently being experienced with the old
system
.
On the other hand
, it will be cheaper for the
government
 to spend more on restoring the current
rail
system
.
This
 should be a more cost-effective solution in the short term if we are considering repair alone.
However
, the current
system
 is getting obsolete and trying to improve it to the technology of today will only lead to spending more
money
. Repairing the current
system
 will not take it to meet up with the public transportation demand of today. In conclusion, the current
rail
system
 is getting too old, repairing it alone will not solve the current demand for a better
rail
system
. It is my view that the
government
 spends
money
 on making a better and faster
rail
system
 connecting large
cities
 and those within the
cities
 should be repaired.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alleviate
  • urban development
  • sustainable
  • road traffic
  • existing infrastructure
  • service quality
  • cost-effective
  • financial drain
  • demographic trends
  • public transport
  • long-term investment
  • cost overruns
  • project delays
  • accessibility
  • intercity commuters
  • infrastructure
  • transportation infrastructure
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